Hi, Overall your essay is pretty good, but I don't know if Professor Beasley is allowing us to use "you." And if we are allowed in the second paragraph I think you meant to type in "your eye" instead of "you eye."
Haha I like how you talk about the affect of a smooth talker, it brings out a good point in your advertisement.
It seems to me that you got down all the points that are required for this essay,and you just need explain a little more in depth about your ad. Plus you should create a better conclusion to wrap up your paper, I think its too short.
Your essay is really well written! And I’m not just saying that. Haha. You analyze the words in the ad really well and deeply. I never would have thought of it in those ways. You really captured the rhetoric tools in the ad and saw them for what they were. Good job! I think you should try re-reading your essay and catching some awkward sentence structures, spelling, and word choice.
I’m not sure if you did this on purpose, but many times it feels like you yourself are advertising Starbucks. Obviously, you think the ad is very persuasive and effective, but maybe you can have a more unbiased standpoint so that you can catch the attention of a broader audience? For instance, you mentioned 7-11’s coffee to be the “mess around the corner”. I understand you’re trying to speak from your ad’s point of view/voice, but it sounds more like a reading of the ad instead of an analysis/critique. I hope I’m making sense…
And you mention at the end of your paper about the colors in the ad. I never saw the ad so I don’t know what it looks like, but you touched a little upon the logo and more upon the text. Maybe you can expand alittle more on the analysis of the colors/picture. You can talk about how its green and how that can be seen as “earthy” or whatever.
Overall, your essay is extremely well written. Good job!
i Think you did a great job on your essay you really went indept with your ad and analyzied it very well. In the begining I didnt think i was going to be able to get a metal image of your ad, but your Indept anaylsis and your use of the rethoric tool was really helpfull to see what your talking about. I really like the your explained how starbucks trys to sell itself as a low-key coffee shop but it is really a big coperation.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteOverall your essay is pretty good, but I don't know if Professor Beasley is allowing us to use "you." And if we are allowed in the second paragraph I think you meant to type in "your eye" instead of "you eye."
Haha I like how you talk about the affect of a smooth talker, it brings out a good point in your advertisement.
It seems to me that you got down all the points that are required for this essay,and you just need explain a little more in depth about your ad. Plus you should create a better conclusion to wrap up your paper, I think its too short.
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Your essay is really well written! And I’m not just saying that. Haha. You analyze the words in the ad really well and deeply. I never would have thought of it in those ways. You really captured the rhetoric tools in the ad and saw them for what they were. Good job! I think you should try re-reading your essay and catching some awkward sentence structures, spelling, and word choice.
ReplyDeleteI’m not sure if you did this on purpose, but many times it feels like you yourself are advertising Starbucks. Obviously, you think the ad is very persuasive and effective, but maybe you can have a more unbiased standpoint so that you can catch the attention of a broader audience? For instance, you mentioned 7-11’s coffee to be the “mess around the corner”. I understand you’re trying to speak from your ad’s point of view/voice, but it sounds more like a reading of the ad instead of an analysis/critique. I hope I’m making sense…
And you mention at the end of your paper about the colors in the ad. I never saw the ad so I don’t know what it looks like, but you touched a little upon the logo and more upon the text. Maybe you can expand alittle more on the analysis of the colors/picture. You can talk about how its green and how that can be seen as “earthy” or whatever.
Overall, your essay is extremely well written. Good job!
hey Anya,
ReplyDeleteI did starbucks too!!great minds think alike ;)
i Think you did a great job on your essay you really went indept with your ad and analyzied it very well. In the begining I didnt think i was going to be able to get a metal image of your ad, but your Indept anaylsis and your use of the rethoric tool was really helpfull to see what your talking about. I really like the your explained how starbucks trys to sell itself as a low-key coffee shop but it is really a big coperation.
good job.