Tran, I quite enjoyed your essay. I like the way you compared the way champion decided to dress/makeup their model compared to other companies featured in the magazine. Glamour is known to be a very high-end fashion magazine, second to Vogue, so this type of ad really stands out. Be careful with your use of parentheses. A lot of places where you used them commas would suffice. I don’t know if parentheses are grammatically correct, but it would be good to check incase they are not. I really like the title of your essay. It really encapsulates the tone. It’s good how you kind of give a background of the Champion Company in the third paragraph. Showing how the company usually advertises and how they want to be perceived and then proving it makes your argument very strong and gives less room for speculation. I think after you finish the essay completely your argument will only get stronger. Great job overall! See you on Thursday!
Tran, I enjoyed the description of the ad. The use of words really expresses the message the brand is trying to send. I liked how you used Champion's logo within your own discription. There seem to be some grammatical errors. You covered all the tools that were asked to be described and I believe that you did a great job of explaining how they function in relation to the ad.
Tran,
ReplyDeleteI quite enjoyed your essay. I like the way you compared the way champion decided to dress/makeup their model compared to other companies featured in the magazine. Glamour is known to be a very high-end fashion magazine, second to Vogue, so this type of ad really stands out. Be careful with your use of parentheses. A lot of places where you used them commas would suffice. I don’t know if parentheses are grammatically correct, but it would be good to check incase they are not. I really like the title of your essay. It really encapsulates the tone. It’s good how you kind of give a background of the Champion Company in the third paragraph. Showing how the company usually advertises and how they want to be perceived and then proving it makes your argument very strong and gives less room for speculation. I think after you finish the essay completely your argument will only get stronger. Great job overall! See you on Thursday!
-Sara
Tran,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the description of the ad. The use of words really expresses the message the brand is trying to send. I liked how you used Champion's logo within your own discription. There seem to be some grammatical errors. You covered all the tools that were asked to be described and I believe that you did a great job of explaining how they function in relation to the ad.
-Tahiris